Acupracacia's Review

Title: "In love with the Chambermaid by acupracacia"
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/inlovewithmycm/chapter_2.shtml
Reviewed By Twilight_gal


Title = 10%

I love it!! It sounds so romantic.

Creativity of the story = 18%

Hm, though I have seen many stories around Winglin/random places, that have
this kind of plot, I tend to like yours better. Oh! Hope you won't mind me
adding this, I adore how Ah Gil does everything he tells her to do!

Posters & bkgrd = 10&

Your poster is relevant to your story which is quite nice to see considering
the complicated colours ^_^. Bkgrd is nice and purple! With a miniture
version of the poster on it! So kawaii! And how it says 'When the arrogant
prince meets his Cinderella' is just so...sweet? =>

Casts used = 5%

I know all of your casts! And I use them too!

Originality = 19.5%

(You haven't completed this fanfiction yet so I have no inkling of an idea
about whats going to happen) As I state above, it is a plot that is
frequently used, but the way you've written it puts a new shine onto it!
Especially the slave part!

Storyline/plotting= 19%

The plotting was nice and even. No suddenly random bits.

Spelling/Grammer = 4%

'Suddenly, Edison felt a something stung her nose. And before he could even
turn around and stifle the next big sneeze, it came out like boom! Causing
Gillian to jump up and spill the coffee all over Edison¡¯s breakfast.'
I'm SURE that you mean 'Suddenly, Edison felt a something sting his nose.
And before he could even turn and stifle the next big sneeze, it came out
like a boom! Causing Gillian to jump up and spill the coffee all over
Edison's breakfast.'
'Suddenly, Gillian turned to face Jolin. She grabbed Jo¡¯s arms and shaked
the hell out of the shocked Jo.'
'Suddenly, Gillian turned to face Jolin. She grabbed Jo's arms and shook the
hell out of the shocked Jo.
'So, DAMN is the word for the day. What is it with your Chambermaid now?¡±
Jay asked as he took his car keys and head to the elevator.'
'So, DAMN is the word for the day. What is it with your Chambermaid now?"
Jay asked as he took his car keys and headed to the elevator.'

Overall enjoyment = 8.5%

I liked this story. It spoke of hardship, love and fun. Bring it up for
reviewing once you've completed it so I can give you an 'Overall enjoyment'
comment since you haven't exactly finished it? uNEXPECTED TURNS
WERE...SAD...-.-

I've given you a 94 cuz I like it!

Total: 94 / 100