snowangel151/snowangel15 and orangecake reviews

How to Get Back at your Boss – By snow angel/orangecake

Title = 10/10
Interesting and cool title! Gripped my attention almost instantaneously and made me have a lot of expectations for the story.

Creativity of the story = 20/20
Definitely full marks.
I like the style of your writing at the starting chapters where you described Hebe’s bad day, I also liked the lipstick trick. Most importantly, the context was fresh. I also liked your epilogue, very cool!

Posters & background = -
Neglible coz you don’t have any =)
By the way, from here onwards it’s not going to be good reading. So brace yourself and I apologie beforehand.

Casts used = 2/5
Hebe as a shotput thrower? That’s so wrong. I don’t really see Hebe as a sporty person and in fact I also don’t see Hebe as such a navie girl either. Show as a bad boss took a little imagination. He did not really suit the job if you asked me.

Originality = 10/20
It was quite a typical plot. I gave you the due credits for some of youe ideas which were very fresh. But bear in mind, those ideas that I mentioned above were good. But besides that, well, nothing much. I could predict the next chapters and there was nothing else that could impress me any further.

Storyline/plotting= 5/20
The only thing the story did right was that the plot actually made sense. Everything else was wrong. And in case anyone is curious why I failed him, allow me to justify myself.
NO character development It was as though anyone could replace Hebe’s position (and probably fitted the role better than she did) and I have no idea what a person Hebe or Show was. They looked one dimensional. And there was no attempt to describe how the characters feel.

2. Unrealistic
I am extremely frustrated when reading the fic when things just happened. SUDDENLY Show realizes that he is in love with Hebe. And by the way, the last I remembered, Show likes Selina is chapter 5. What caused the change? Not explained. Then SUDDENLY when Show kisses Hebe, Hebe kissed him back and realize that she likes him? I almost cursed. This so doesn’t make sense. And moreover, does anyone think that Hebe would trust Lee Hom if they just met?? Why would Hebe cry on Show shoulders when she hated him like crazy (although it’s true that he just rescued her?) Hm Very very questionable plot and left me highly unsatisfied.

3Unflowy plot
Something happened and SUDDENLY something else happened from nowhere. No sense of time and place either. And I really cannot stand how the writers destroy climaxes. The scene where Show saved Hebe was supposed to be dramatic and guess what? I felt nothing.

4. Boring
Readers may be fooled by the “fun” that this fic is creating, but actually this fic has no content at all. It was just tricks and tricks and not to mention, there weren’t a lot, and some of them (like the using a bf to coax Hebe one) aren’t realistic either. Besides the tricks, there is nothing in this fic. And this is the main reason why I had to fail the plot.

Spelling/Grammar = 3/ 5
Decent grammar with some mistakes though. Nothing too impressive besides a couple of “chim” words.

Overall enjoyment = 2/10
The only thing I enjoyed was the lipstick trick on Show.
I was desperate to finish the fic.
It was as though I didn’t read anything at all.
Very very disappointing fic.
You let down a lot of people who read the fic who were expecting more.

Total: 52/90, rounded to be 57/100 (Not recommended unless you are super free)
I felt unjust giving you such a mark. I wished I could fail you, really, I am sorry. But I cannot cut your creativity and title marks as those ideas were very original. And you did not have a poster and I can’t give you zero like that, it would be unfair. But I really did not enjoyed the fic. So I can say, you were saved by your creativity.
Please re write your fic. Keep the ideas though.