Xuewen's review
Second Glances – By xuewen URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/xuewen/
Reviewed By: Jessie
Title = 9/10
I like the title. It ties in with the fic very well. The only problem is that I thought I had heard the title somewhere before, it’s just am impression thing.
I like the title. It ties in with the fic very well. The only problem is that I thought I had heard the title somewhere before, it’s just am impression thing.
Creativity of the story = 14/20
The onset offset idea isn’t very new, neither it is a third party intrusion. But the plot is saved by the introduction of an Englishman, I thought the idea of an Englishman after Ella is quite cool. I also liked the idea of Zhun already having a girlfriend before meeting Ella. A problematic girlfriend I must add.
The onset offset idea isn’t very new, neither it is a third party intrusion. But the plot is saved by the introduction of an Englishman, I thought the idea of an Englishman after Ella is quite cool. I also liked the idea of Zhun already having a girlfriend before meeting Ella. A problematic girlfriend I must add.
Posters & background = 10/10
I liked the poster and background a lot =) Black and red is one of my personal favorite combination. At first I thought I am deducting one off because red reminds me the colour of the blood and action and gang fights and this fic is not about it. Somehow the red text just kept reminding me of gang fights. Then she mentioned Lucifer and the mysterious Zhun. And the whole poster and the background made sense and suited so perfectly into the fic. So 10/10!
I liked the poster and background a lot =) Black and red is one of my personal favorite combination. At first I thought I am deducting one off because red reminds me the colour of the blood and action and gang fights and this fic is not about it. Somehow the red text just kept reminding me of gang fights. Then she mentioned Lucifer and the mysterious Zhun. And the whole poster and the background made sense and suited so perfectly into the fic. So 10/10!
Casts used = 5/5
I liked the fact that she portrayed Jiro as Ella's "best friend", it is fresh yet not strange. In fact i did enjoy the way the author described Jiro as Ella's teddy bear. I also liked how she actually named the directors etc after real names instead of just the direction, it gives the story a realistic edge.
I liked the fact that she portrayed Jiro as Ella's "best friend", it is fresh yet not strange. In fact i did enjoy the way the author described Jiro as Ella's teddy bear. I also liked how she actually named the directors etc after real names instead of just the direction, it gives the story a realistic edge.
Originality = 13/20
Comparing to her other stories, I personally this story started out much more typical although her langauge powers and vivid description of the emotions of the characters did disguise the fact that this is a very simple story. I was personally going her a rather low score for originality until the part where Zhun confessed that he was tied to a problematic girlfriend. This was extremely original as none of the CE fics I have read had protrayed Chun already attached. And with a crazy girlfriend. I personally seeing a lot of potential for this fic to explore new grounds with the introduction of this girlfriend.
Comparing to her other stories, I personally this story started out much more typical although her langauge powers and vivid description of the emotions of the characters did disguise the fact that this is a very simple story. I was personally going her a rather low score for originality until the part where Zhun confessed that he was tied to a problematic girlfriend. This was extremely original as none of the CE fics I have read had protrayed Chun already attached. And with a crazy girlfriend. I personally seeing a lot of potential for this fic to explore new grounds with the introduction of this girlfriend.
Storyline/plotting= 14/20
This story isn't boring at all as every chapter seemed to have a climax of its own. There were little perks of actions at places where Chun punched Drew, where Ella met Chun and etc. That was what made this story extremely captivating as a reader would be assured that very chapter would an exciting one. Up till now, the story only focused on Chun and Ella instead of focusing briefly on everyone else. I am personally very much in favour of this style as I would personally prefer depth than width as many fics have attempted to talked about 4-5 couples in 20 chapters and ended up not exploring the depths of the relationship. The story is also very clear in her focus and very easy to follow. What is lacking in this fic is the X factor which will separate it apart from other fics. So if the author finds this X factor, then this story would be very good!
This story isn't boring at all as every chapter seemed to have a climax of its own. There were little perks of actions at places where Chun punched Drew, where Ella met Chun and etc. That was what made this story extremely captivating as a reader would be assured that very chapter would an exciting one. Up till now, the story only focused on Chun and Ella instead of focusing briefly on everyone else. I am personally very much in favour of this style as I would personally prefer depth than width as many fics have attempted to talked about 4-5 couples in 20 chapters and ended up not exploring the depths of the relationship. The story is also very clear in her focus and very easy to follow. What is lacking in this fic is the X factor which will separate it apart from other fics. So if the author finds this X factor, then this story would be very good!
Spelling/Grammar = 5/5
Basically, perfect grammar, perfect spelling and very comfortable with the language. The author has a special talent of making scenes and emotions come alive using words. Not only that, the words she used are beautiful. The writer has the talent of making ordinary things extraordinary, she adds colour to normal circumstances by her acute choices of words and her sensitive depiction of the action and emotion of the character. The language is so flawless that I wished I could give her more than 5/5.
I haven’t read anyone in Winglin that can beat her writing. Not yet.
Basically, perfect grammar, perfect spelling and very comfortable with the language. The author has a special talent of making scenes and emotions come alive using words. Not only that, the words she used are beautiful. The writer has the talent of making ordinary things extraordinary, she adds colour to normal circumstances by her acute choices of words and her sensitive depiction of the action and emotion of the character. The language is so flawless that I wished I could give her more than 5/5.
I haven’t read anyone in Winglin that can beat her writing. Not yet.
Overall enjoyment = 7/10
The story did grip me at some parts. It was slick and I as very impressed at Chun 's various attempts to talk to Ella, and makes me heart ache when Chun could not be with Ella. The story did not leave me salivating for more, but it is one that i would enjoy reading it as it's a true piece of writing. It is smooth and slick, but not as personal for me. But special kudos to her language talents though =) This story, feels like one that have a very typical box and special little goodies in it. But like I said earlier, it is good but fails to awe me. (Wait, edition: The language awes me, the plot doesn’t)
The story did grip me at some parts. It was slick and I as very impressed at Chun 's various attempts to talk to Ella, and makes me heart ache when Chun could not be with Ella. The story did not leave me salivating for more, but it is one that i would enjoy reading it as it's a true piece of writing. It is smooth and slick, but not as personal for me. But special kudos to her language talents though =) This story, feels like one that have a very typical box and special little goodies in it. But like I said earlier, it is good but fails to awe me. (Wait, edition: The language awes me, the plot doesn’t)
Total: 77/100 (Pretty decent read. I would call it a coffee-table fic)
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