Cryselle's Reviews
Title: 9/10
Mm, the first look at your title it gives a impression of this is surely a romantic love story before carrying on reading your forewords but I actually deducted one marks from this section is because there's couple of fan fiction also did use this word 'romance' as title, though having the same words or maybe similar title but there's a word love in front of the romance which gives readers a clear view of what your story is going to be.
Mm, the first look at your title it gives a impression of this is surely a romantic love story before carrying on reading your forewords but I actually deducted one marks from this section is because there's couple of fan fiction also did use this word 'romance' as title, though having the same words or maybe similar title but there's a word love in front of the romance which gives readers a clear view of what your story is going to be.
Creativity of Story: 20 / 20
Full marks goes for this section as you really deserve for a full marks because this is indeed a creative story which is about families relationship and something that got to relate to the previous generation than it will brings the two together, not only you writes about family but there's about friendship, love, life and in one story I can find different types genre inside this story which normally there isn't one which such multi tasking of genre, anyway I found strong creativity in this story.
Full marks goes for this section as you really deserve for a full marks because this is indeed a creative story which is about families relationship and something that got to relate to the previous generation than it will brings the two together, not only you writes about family but there's about friendship, love, life and in one story I can find different types genre inside this story which normally there isn't one which such multi tasking of genre, anyway I found strong creativity in this story.
Poster & Background: 8/10
For this section, the poster did not really shows out the romantic of the story but the only thing I found something lovely in the poster was the couple picture at the background of the poster hugging and enjoying the sea scenery which maybe slightly shows the romantic of it and another was the casts was all reveal in the poster that's gives the reader a clear view of who is actually the main casts. Background really blends in well with the fonts that you using, which you used Maroon colour than matches the white background and the picture in the background did not really covers the words.
For this section, the poster did not really shows out the romantic of the story but the only thing I found something lovely in the poster was the couple picture at the background of the poster hugging and enjoying the sea scenery which maybe slightly shows the romantic of it and another was the casts was all reveal in the poster that's gives the reader a clear view of who is actually the main casts. Background really blends in well with the fonts that you using, which you used Maroon colour than matches the white background and the picture in the background did not really covers the words.
Cast Used: 10 / 10
I can only say that Fahrenheit and SHE is getting real popular in fan fiction nowadays, every where I goes reading in winglin; I sees Fahrenheit and SHE fan fiction and it is always boom with readers in the comments so is a great choice to used them as they really suits each other very well as for your pairing it already deserve another full marks but I am only allow to give 10 marks because Hebe suits Aaron, Chun obviously suits Ella and as for Selina; she suits both Jiro and Calvin so I have no comments in this section and gave a full marks.
I can only say that Fahrenheit and SHE is getting real popular in fan fiction nowadays, every where I goes reading in winglin; I sees Fahrenheit and SHE fan fiction and it is always boom with readers in the comments so is a great choice to used them as they really suits each other very well as for your pairing it already deserve another full marks but I am only allow to give 10 marks because Hebe suits Aaron, Chun obviously suits Ella and as for Selina; she suits both Jiro and Calvin so I have no comments in this section and gave a full marks.
Originality: 19 / 20
Mm, originality section I gave a marks of 19 and is not because your story was not original but in some parts it looks like it's quite common in some fan fiction, for example of the sickness of Hebe suffering and Ella playing basketball with Chun, which she always tries to create Chun's attention by playing basketball match together. Maybe you can try to twist some of their characters around like Selina and Ella switching characters but overall I can find your own ideas and instincts here so I minus one marks from here.
Mm, originality section I gave a marks of 19 and is not because your story was not original but in some parts it looks like it's quite common in some fan fiction, for example of the sickness of Hebe suffering and Ella playing basketball with Chun, which she always tries to create Chun's attention by playing basketball match together. Maybe you can try to twist some of their characters around like Selina and Ella switching characters but overall I can find your own ideas and instincts here so I minus one marks from here.
Story / Plotting: 20 / 20
Your plotting really makes sense as you did goes along with the flow of your story and it gives the reader a clear view of your planning as what the character will got to do next or what will happened in the next scene. You have also clearly given a end of chapter in every chapter by telling the readers that this is the full stop for this chapter, you did also placed some cliffhanger here and there in the chapter which makes your readers jumps around in their chair.
Your plotting really makes sense as you did goes along with the flow of your story and it gives the reader a clear view of your planning as what the character will got to do next or what will happened in the next scene. You have also clearly given a end of chapter in every chapter by telling the readers that this is the full stop for this chapter, you did also placed some cliffhanger here and there in the chapter which makes your readers jumps around in their chair.
P.S: I know this because I one of your readers and plus I read the comments given by the other readers.
Grammer / Spelling: 5 / 5
Mm, I gave you full marks for this section because seriously I can't find any of spelling mistakes in this any of the chapters but there's some slight grammer mistakes that can't be notice by the readers clearly so I think is kinda of alright in this section.
Mm, I gave you full marks for this section because seriously I can't find any of spelling mistakes in this any of the chapters but there's some slight grammer mistakes that can't be notice by the readers clearly so I think is kinda of alright in this section.
Overall Enjoyment: 10 / 10
I totally enjoy your fan fiction Cryselle, is so nice and enjoying and makes me wanna continuing reading it but too bad you only update once a week or maybe twice but sometimes your scene really makes me jumping up and down trying to kill you off cause you are making MY JIRO suffering and trying to give up on Selina, not only this you even make Hebe having those silly thinking but never mind I know you will change Hebe's thinking soon. Anyway, this is really a great fan fiction and continue to update than I will there punctually.
I totally enjoy your fan fiction Cryselle, is so nice and enjoying and makes me wanna continuing reading it but too bad you only update once a week or maybe twice but sometimes your scene really makes me jumping up and down trying to kill you off cause you are making MY JIRO suffering and trying to give up on Selina, not only this you even make Hebe having those silly thinking but never mind I know you will change Hebe's thinking soon. Anyway, this is really a great fan fiction and continue to update than I will there punctually.
Total: 99 / 100 (Highly recommended)
Cryselle: Sorry for the late reviews and I apologized for any grammer mistakes.
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