Emilyy reviews
Title: Shadows of the Past
Author: Emilyy
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Emilyy7/
Reviewed by: xIaojO
Author: Emilyy
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Emilyy7/
Reviewed by: xIaojO
Title: 10 / 10
Seriously, you have a fabulous title that was link with the plot you are using in the story. One look at your title it gives me a confused mind on what will it be, will it going to be something sad or maybe something bad that's happened to both the major characters. Ultimate great title so you deserve a full marks here.
Seriously, you have a fabulous title that was link with the plot you are using in the story. One look at your title it gives me a confused mind on what will it be, will it going to be something sad or maybe something bad that's happened to both the major characters. Ultimate great title so you deserve a full marks here.
Creativity of Story: 15 / 20
Mmm, though there isn't much of this genre in winglin but the flow and plot you are using looks alike with one of the TVB serial movie which it is also acted by Ron, the storyline looks pretty alike with Ron in the role of a high ranking person in a corporation and all sorts of family argument about the family business but overall there's a twist of in there of Tavia resemble Tonya cause before that I thought is supposed to be Leila and that's a twist there to move your readers around, although there's couple of this plot use in winglin.
Mmm, though there isn't much of this genre in winglin but the flow and plot you are using looks alike with one of the TVB serial movie which it is also acted by Ron, the storyline looks pretty alike with Ron in the role of a high ranking person in a corporation and all sorts of family argument about the family business but overall there's a twist of in there of Tavia resemble Tonya cause before that I thought is supposed to be Leila and that's a twist there to move your readers around, although there's couple of this plot use in winglin.
Poster and Background: 10 / 10
The poster and backgrounds are both very nice with the font colours easy for the eyes to read and the it also blends in well with the background, one thing I like about the poster is it shows cool-ness of Ron; giving readers the first of expression that his life is full of hatred so it suits with your characters.
The poster and backgrounds are both very nice with the font colours easy for the eyes to read and the it also blends in well with the background, one thing I like about the poster is it shows cool-ness of Ron; giving readers the first of expression that his life is full of hatred so it suits with your characters.
Cast Used: 5 / 5
There's nothing I can comment here cause I seriously love this pair.
There's nothing I can comment here cause I seriously love this pair.
Originality: 18 / 20
Your story is not really so original cause there's some stories out there in winglin have almost the same plot but of course there's only a certain part of it that merely looks alike as the other's story so I slightly deducted 2 marks from here for I feel somehow I read it somewhere before or maybe is just similarities.
Your story is not really so original cause there's some stories out there in winglin have almost the same plot but of course there's only a certain part of it that merely looks alike as the other's story so I slightly deducted 2 marks from here for I feel somehow I read it somewhere before or maybe is just similarities.
Story / Plotting: 15 / 20
Mmm, the story seems very well plot as you know what are the cast going to do after each scene or chapters is well plot and they blends into the storyline that you are applying but the only thing I still don't really get it until now is the thing about Tonya and Ron. The only thing I know was Tonya actually betrayed Ron and was killed later, that's also causes Ron's hatred against her. Maybe you can try to write a flashback on this to clarify on what happened to them.
Mmm, the story seems very well plot as you know what are the cast going to do after each scene or chapters is well plot and they blends into the storyline that you are applying but the only thing I still don't really get it until now is the thing about Tonya and Ron. The only thing I know was Tonya actually betrayed Ron and was killed later, that's also causes Ron's hatred against her. Maybe you can try to write a flashback on this to clarify on what happened to them.
Grammer / Spelling: 5 / 5
I can't really spots any grammer or spelling mistakes in yours story so anyway this part deserve a great full marks. Excellent =)
I can't really spots any grammer or spelling mistakes in yours story so anyway this part deserve a great full marks. Excellent =)
Overall Enjoyment: 18 / 20
Seriously, I just thinks that this story is really a great one as there's each and every cliffhanger place in the chapters that urge me to continue reading until I can't stop so honestly speaking though this is not a nice and interesting fan fiction in the beginning but later part of the story it really interest me to read continuing reading on. (P.S I read the comments leaves down by your readers =P)
Seriously, I just thinks that this story is really a great one as there's each and every cliffhanger place in the chapters that urge me to continue reading until I can't stop so honestly speaking though this is not a nice and interesting fan fiction in the beginning but later part of the story it really interest me to read continuing reading on. (P.S I read the comments leaves down by your readers =P)
Total: 96 / 100
Bonus: 3 / 3 ( Thanks for linking us back)
Bonus: 3 / 3 ( Thanks for linking us back)
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