Fairy219 reviews
Title: [*** The Free-Spirited Princess ***]
URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/fsp
Reviewed by: SHE_Farenheit
Title: 8/10
Commentary: I find your title inspiring, even creative, my imaginations roaming wild to find out who’s the free-spirited princess. However, the amount of fan fiction I have read in winglin always made the character free-spirited; therefore I award you eight marks on this part although the title is full of vibrant life. I understood the title when I finish the story, which is up to where you have posted, chapter 21.
Poster/Background: 6/10
Commentary: Actually when I didn’t read the story yet, I found the title and the picture in the story irrelevant. But when I slowly started reading the story, I got it. Actually the cake in the story is about how Princess Irene loved baking. For the background part, it is quite dull as it is not at all attractive, just the same plain white, maybe you could try daring colors like what xuewen did in her fan fiction, Office Politics as it attracts the reader at first glance. If you do not know anything about using html coding, I advise that you look on the web as there are plenty of suggestive webs giving you idea on mixing the colors. I have to say, sadly that I can only give you marks for the poster alone as the background is the standard for every fan fiction posted. You could follow my suggestion and change the background and font color as it would seem more attractive. However, on second thought, the words and the background were legible. So, I would award you a extra mark on this part.
Forewords: 10/10
Commentary: I have to agree that the forewords written was very good and nice as a few simple sentences written can just simply highlight the main parts of the story like what a book of fiction does. Similarly, it gives the reader a tinkling feeling of curiosity to read on which is really great! You did not reveal the names of the commoner and the crush even Irene’s character, which is good. For this part, I’m speechless.
Flow & Writing Quality: 13/15
The writing style is smooth, really great, like a story. It’s not dreggy at all, but straight to the point. The part I like best about your writing quality is that you choose to write it from either Irene’s or Marco’s perspective, which makes the story real nice. I was busy reading through, finding out whether you wrote something about Marco’s identity being found out by Irene as it would make a great suspense and climate point in the story. Quite a little bit of disappointment when there wasn’t as you continued the story on and on about their first meeting, Irene’s life. I feel like shouting at you and saying, “Get on with the story already!”
Storyline/Plot: 14/15
The plot of the story is great as I can’t wait for the story is when Irene finds out that Marco is the prince which she rejected a few years ago. However, I do not really like the parts which seem dreggy like slowly Irene falls for Marco. It’s a bit too late as Irene only finds out that she likes Marco after the 21st chapter, which is a disappointment. The plot made sense as it is like, what happened one day and what happened later. I have to admit that it was plotted nicely.
Creativity/Originality: 9/10
As I didn’t read any winglin fan fiction about normal girls, only read about some of my favorite artists, I can’t really make a fair comment on this part. The originality mark is there although the creativity is a bit of a on off as I have read a lot of fiction and marked this off as a typical princess-meets-prince story. The part about not using real life characters but using fictional characters is quite a good start on the uniqueness of the story.
Spelling & Grammar: 14/15
Well, I only spotted a few grammar mistakes, but I presume it to be a part of rushing on this chapter and not checking, so I’m not really penalizing a lot for this part. Otherwise, the story is fine.
Overall Enjoyment: 13/15
I have to say that this story is indeed exciting and enjoyable in its own way for the reader to continue reading. There was some funny bits, like the guards’ name, you must have gotten it from the cartoon “Tom & Jerry” debating on who to wake her up, you could have stated that nobody who wakes Irene up gets a good outcome, haha. And the part where Irene keeps adding the “Polo” part, I presume is for the comedy (: Irene’s attitude was what I have always admired in Meg Cabot’s Princess Diaries, a stubborn rebel’s attitude. Besides that one part I mentioned, there is still room for improvement in your story, continue working hard!
Total: 87/100
I’m not going to change it because someone will hate me for it. It is good to be a baddie, coz you are honestly heading out to help even if it sounds bad. It’s the way life is, and I am not a fan of giving sugary remarks so just live with it. That’s how bad reality is. I have no regrets in writing this as it tells the author how good/bad her story is and what parts can her story improve in. Compare it to the previous review and you may find a lot of marks gone. Yes, it is a big drop from the score of 103 marks, but this is still a decent review.
Readers, proceed to read this piece of review and don’t hesitate to read on because of my sarcastic crap. It’s quite a good story but improvement can still be made.
Work hard!
URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/fsp
Reviewed by: SHE_Farenheit
Title: 8/10
Commentary: I find your title inspiring, even creative, my imaginations roaming wild to find out who’s the free-spirited princess. However, the amount of fan fiction I have read in winglin always made the character free-spirited; therefore I award you eight marks on this part although the title is full of vibrant life. I understood the title when I finish the story, which is up to where you have posted, chapter 21.
Poster/Background: 6/10
Commentary: Actually when I didn’t read the story yet, I found the title and the picture in the story irrelevant. But when I slowly started reading the story, I got it. Actually the cake in the story is about how Princess Irene loved baking. For the background part, it is quite dull as it is not at all attractive, just the same plain white, maybe you could try daring colors like what xuewen did in her fan fiction, Office Politics as it attracts the reader at first glance. If you do not know anything about using html coding, I advise that you look on the web as there are plenty of suggestive webs giving you idea on mixing the colors. I have to say, sadly that I can only give you marks for the poster alone as the background is the standard for every fan fiction posted. You could follow my suggestion and change the background and font color as it would seem more attractive. However, on second thought, the words and the background were legible. So, I would award you a extra mark on this part.
Forewords: 10/10
Commentary: I have to agree that the forewords written was very good and nice as a few simple sentences written can just simply highlight the main parts of the story like what a book of fiction does. Similarly, it gives the reader a tinkling feeling of curiosity to read on which is really great! You did not reveal the names of the commoner and the crush even Irene’s character, which is good. For this part, I’m speechless.
Flow & Writing Quality: 13/15
The writing style is smooth, really great, like a story. It’s not dreggy at all, but straight to the point. The part I like best about your writing quality is that you choose to write it from either Irene’s or Marco’s perspective, which makes the story real nice. I was busy reading through, finding out whether you wrote something about Marco’s identity being found out by Irene as it would make a great suspense and climate point in the story. Quite a little bit of disappointment when there wasn’t as you continued the story on and on about their first meeting, Irene’s life. I feel like shouting at you and saying, “Get on with the story already!”
Storyline/Plot: 14/15
The plot of the story is great as I can’t wait for the story is when Irene finds out that Marco is the prince which she rejected a few years ago. However, I do not really like the parts which seem dreggy like slowly Irene falls for Marco. It’s a bit too late as Irene only finds out that she likes Marco after the 21st chapter, which is a disappointment. The plot made sense as it is like, what happened one day and what happened later. I have to admit that it was plotted nicely.
Creativity/Originality: 9/10
As I didn’t read any winglin fan fiction about normal girls, only read about some of my favorite artists, I can’t really make a fair comment on this part. The originality mark is there although the creativity is a bit of a on off as I have read a lot of fiction and marked this off as a typical princess-meets-prince story. The part about not using real life characters but using fictional characters is quite a good start on the uniqueness of the story.
Spelling & Grammar: 14/15
Well, I only spotted a few grammar mistakes, but I presume it to be a part of rushing on this chapter and not checking, so I’m not really penalizing a lot for this part. Otherwise, the story is fine.
Overall Enjoyment: 13/15
I have to say that this story is indeed exciting and enjoyable in its own way for the reader to continue reading. There was some funny bits, like the guards’ name, you must have gotten it from the cartoon “Tom & Jerry” debating on who to wake her up, you could have stated that nobody who wakes Irene up gets a good outcome, haha. And the part where Irene keeps adding the “Polo” part, I presume is for the comedy (: Irene’s attitude was what I have always admired in Meg Cabot’s Princess Diaries, a stubborn rebel’s attitude. Besides that one part I mentioned, there is still room for improvement in your story, continue working hard!
Total: 87/100
I’m not going to change it because someone will hate me for it. It is good to be a baddie, coz you are honestly heading out to help even if it sounds bad. It’s the way life is, and I am not a fan of giving sugary remarks so just live with it. That’s how bad reality is. I have no regrets in writing this as it tells the author how good/bad her story is and what parts can her story improve in. Compare it to the previous review and you may find a lot of marks gone. Yes, it is a big drop from the score of 103 marks, but this is still a decent review.
Readers, proceed to read this piece of review and don’t hesitate to read on because of my sarcastic crap. It’s quite a good story but improvement can still be made.
Work hard!
posted by Viva - teamo at
8:27 AM
1 Comments:
I tried to send you an email but your email address didn't work so I thought I leave a comment here ^^
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Hello there Felicia ^^ (you have a nice name!)
I just want to personally thank you for the review ^^
I don't know if you read the message I leave you in the tag but yeah, I think when you review you don't need to justify the way you review. Relax. If people's gonna hate you so be it. Write what you want! You're the reviewer! Writing "yes I know this review seem mean...etc or I'm not a fan of giving sugary remarks and so on" only makes you sound uhm meaner ^^ ehehehehe
So thanks again ^^ I agree with most of the things you say.
And PS. I don't hate you.
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