Sheepoling review
Title of Fan fiction: Affinity Unbounded
Title: 9/10
I have to agree that the title is unique and creative as nobody would guess what does Affinity Unbounded means. The very word, “Affinity” is another meaning for Fate and “Unbounded” I guess means plenty. After reading the first few chapters, I have to agree that the title does relate to the author, thus earning you a high score on my list , however the word “Affinity” or rather it’s hidden meaning, “Fate” is used in a lot of fan fiction around winglin , thus the deduction of marks.
I have to agree that the title is unique and creative as nobody would guess what does Affinity Unbounded means. The very word, “Affinity” is another meaning for Fate and “Unbounded” I guess means plenty. After reading the first few chapters, I have to agree that the title does relate to the author, thus earning you a high score on my list , however the word “Affinity” or rather it’s hidden meaning, “Fate” is used in a lot of fan fiction around winglin , thus the deduction of marks.
Poster/Background: 8/10
The poster matches the title as it tells us about the story’s characters as well as a startling phrase, “Would we meet again?”, arouses the reader’s curiosity. However, much as I agree with your poster which was indeed well-made for the story, I find the background unsuitable as such. The font and the background color blended in together, leaving me no complains about that. Perhaps you might change the background to just simply peachy-brown as the picture hides some of the words, which causes discomfort to the reader.
The poster matches the title as it tells us about the story’s characters as well as a startling phrase, “Would we meet again?”, arouses the reader’s curiosity. However, much as I agree with your poster which was indeed well-made for the story, I find the background unsuitable as such. The font and the background color blended in together, leaving me no complains about that. Perhaps you might change the background to just simply peachy-brown as the picture hides some of the words, which causes discomfort to the reader.
Forewords: 6/10
The forewords are pretty plain, as it simply just states the characters who are in the story and not much about the plot; A alternative suggestion is for the author to add in some quotes, for example, “I had enough..” etc or just some prologue to arouse the reader’s interest.
The forewords are pretty plain, as it simply just states the characters who are in the story and not much about the plot; A alternative suggestion is for the author to add in some quotes, for example, “I had enough..” etc or just some prologue to arouse the reader’s interest.
Flow & Writing Quality: 15/15
The story flows quite smoothly I have to admit, starting with Ella & Chun meeting with each other and going on to Hebe losing her memory and once again meeting Arron. The writing quality is quite good except for some parts where the lines are not very good. But, I know as I have tried to type on MS Word and copied all. It turned out a mess. It does urge readers to read on, however, you keep moving to other characters. So, maybe it’s better to start with a couple in the story and not all 7 at all. Sometimes, I feel like skipping the chapters and go on to the last chapter to read.
The story flows quite smoothly I have to admit, starting with Ella & Chun meeting with each other and going on to Hebe losing her memory and once again meeting Arron. The writing quality is quite good except for some parts where the lines are not very good. But, I know as I have tried to type on MS Word and copied all. It turned out a mess. It does urge readers to read on, however, you keep moving to other characters. So, maybe it’s better to start with a couple in the story and not all 7 at all. Sometimes, I feel like skipping the chapters and go on to the last chapter to read.
Storyline/Plot: 13/15
The storyline does connect with the characters. However, after reading, I can feel that the story is getting draggy and I can’t be bothered to read on. You focus too much on Arron, Calvin and Hebe’s three-sided relationship too much. The plot makes sense as the reader knows what she is reading about. For the plotting part, not so well as the characters are like, not organized in their roles. One minute, the reader may read about Hebe and Arron’s relationship and the next, Selina and Jiro or Ella and Chun.
The storyline does connect with the characters. However, after reading, I can feel that the story is getting draggy and I can’t be bothered to read on. You focus too much on Arron, Calvin and Hebe’s three-sided relationship too much. The plot makes sense as the reader knows what she is reading about. For the plotting part, not so well as the characters are like, not organized in their roles. One minute, the reader may read about Hebe and Arron’s relationship and the next, Selina and Jiro or Ella and Chun.
Creativity/Originality: 9/10
The characters and pairing are too clear-cut and common in winglin stories but the part where you invent stories like Hebe losing her memory and Ella&Chun becoming step-siblings is indeed unique.
The characters and pairing are too clear-cut and common in winglin stories but the part where you invent stories like Hebe losing her memory and Ella&Chun becoming step-siblings is indeed unique.
Spelling & Grammar: 13/15
I can spot some spelling and grammar errors. However, if the reader is engrossed in the story and understand what the author is trying to express in words, the reader will not bother at all and just simply continue reading. Try not to give too much spelling and grammar errors as it ruins the story, plus, try not to use short-form words like “Ok..” in conversations, instead use the whole form, “Okay..” as it is slightly better even in conversations.
I can spot some spelling and grammar errors. However, if the reader is engrossed in the story and understand what the author is trying to express in words, the reader will not bother at all and just simply continue reading. Try not to give too much spelling and grammar errors as it ruins the story, plus, try not to use short-form words like “Ok..” in conversations, instead use the whole form, “Okay..” as it is slightly better even in conversations.
Overall Enjoyment: 14/15
The story was interesting and enjoyable, the way you twisted your way through words to express the character’s feelings and the obstacles that they face in their run for true love.
The story was interesting and enjoyable, the way you twisted your way through words to express the character’s feelings and the obstacles that they face in their run for true love.
Total: 89/100
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