Echoed Memories

Echoed memories

Author: dancing firefly

URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/something

Length: Chapter 1 – 19 (incomplete, yet)

Reviewed by: Cryselle

Title – 10/10

It’s a different or should I say unique title. I’ve seen quite a number ofstories using memories as their title but with the addition of the word‘echoed’, it doesn’t sound and mean the same thing anymore. From the title,readers can somehow guess what the story will be about. The meaning isclear.

Poster/background – 10/10

Purple symbolizes mysterious and enigma. You’ve a great choice of colour forthe poster. With the black background, it further strengthens the emotionyou’re trying to portray in your story – dark and mysterious. Again. Nicequotes on the poster. It’s really meaningful. The pictures of the charactersall wear the same expression, which match the story.

Foreword – 10/10

It is nicely written and very descriptive. The emotion of the person can bestrongly felt. It somehow lures the reader into your story as if there isone of the characters the story. It makes the reader as one of them.

Flow/writing quality – 10/15

The flow of the story is just right, neither fast-paced nor slow-winded. Youhave a different writing style than the stories I’ve read. I’m saying yourwriting style is not good. Different people has different writing style,what is important is that you’re comfortable with it and easily understandby the readers. However, it’ll be better if you state the name of the personinstead of beginning the paragraph with he and there are 3 main guyscharacters in your story. I always have no idea which he you meant untilhalfway through his part.

Storyline/plot – 10/10

It’s a nice story and nicely written. Especially the connection between QiaoEn’s past and present, her connection with Chun. That is actually a greattwist. You’ve maintained the mood more or less in the same mood that ismysterious. That is a compliment. Every chapter seems to reveal something.Originality/creativity – 10/10It’s a unique story. Never had I ever read a story like yours which hassomething to do with reincarnation and the love from the previous life.

Grammar/spelling – 8/15

There are many grammar and spelling mistakes here and there. I’m sorry tosay but it’s true. And I’ve read the author’s note you wrote at the end ofchapter 19. I don’t like to hurt people but I’m glad that you know yourweakness. However, your vocabulary is fine and there are some directtranslations from Chinese to English and punctuation too.There are some examples below:‘But she wasn’t lying; she knew how it feels.’ It should be: ‘…she knew howit felt.’‘ He asked for her permission, she nodded her head and so he stood up, leftimmediately.’ It should be: ‘He asked for her permission. When she nodded,he stood up and left.’

Casts used – 4/5

I don’t see the chemistry between Qiao En and Chun. And I cannot pictureQiao En being with Chun. Maybe it is because they had never acted in aseries before. From my wild guess, Qiao En will end up with Chun right? Igot a feeling about it. That is why I keep stressing on both of them only.Qiao En with either Ming Dao or Shao Wei, I’ve no complain because theyreally look compatible.

Overall enjoyment – 8/10

It is entertaining and like I said before, it’s a nice story. But I findsome part unnecessary. Especially the part about Ming Dao teaching Qiao Enhow to be a good wife. Overall, it’s a story worth reading.

Total marks – 80/100 (highly recommendable)

Keep up the good work and continue to update. I’ll await your updates.