Melt my heart of Ice
Melt my heart of Ice
Written by: Ice_princesS3
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/Ice_princesS/
Status of fanfic: Chapter 1 – 3 (incomplete, yet)
Reviewed by: Cryselle
Title - 9/10
The title is indeed a special one. It tells everything about the story.
Poster/background – 7/10
There is no poster but even though poster; I can briefly tell what the storyis about. However, I can’t see the connection between the black backgroundand the cold personality you’re portraying on one of the characters – Hebe.Some colour which somehow has connection with ‘cold’ is blue or light blue.
Foreword – 8/10
The foreword is quite good on the descriptions on the characters and all.But something is lacking. You didn’t describe much on the story. You canwrite a summary or something more on what you’ve written. It doesn’t tellmuch on the story. It’s all about the characters.
Flow/writing quality -12/15
Maybe it’s because there are just two real chapters that I don’t see asmooth writing. I know different people have different writing styles andall. But it’s just not connected as the first chapter is on Hebe and theother on Calvin. There is not connection there. It’s like telling twodifferent people’s lives. However like I said before, maybe it’s just theintroduction for the two main characters first. So I don’t deduct much here.Regarding your writing quality, I really like it. It’s really smooth and theway you put everything together is different. It’s like reading a book,something like an American novel and I really like it.
Storyline/plot – 12/15
Frankly speaking, it’s kind of cliché. I mean I’ve read some stories likethat before – the guy being the playboy, their parents had known each otherlike forever and are trying to matchmake them together.
Originality/creativity – 9/10
Considering your writing quality, it’s good. Even though the plot is not a special one, but your way of bring it out to the readers make it totally different.
Grammar/spelling – 15/15
I don’t spot any grammar mistakes or spelling mistakes here. And you really deserve the full marks. I’ve never came across a story with no mistakes at all. This is my first time.
Casts used – 5/5
It’s a really special pairing. Never had I came across a story with Calvin and Hebe pairing but I’ve seen some stories with the pairing of Hebe and the other three of Fahrenheit members.
Overall enjoyment – 10/10
Even though your plot doesn’t catch much of my attention but your perfect grammar and smooth writing win it all so I totally enjoyed reading it.
Total marks – 87/100 (highly recommendable)
Written by: Ice_princesS3
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/Ice_princesS/
Status of fanfic: Chapter 1 – 3 (incomplete, yet)
Reviewed by: Cryselle
Title - 9/10
The title is indeed a special one. It tells everything about the story.
Poster/background – 7/10
There is no poster but even though poster; I can briefly tell what the storyis about. However, I can’t see the connection between the black backgroundand the cold personality you’re portraying on one of the characters – Hebe.Some colour which somehow has connection with ‘cold’ is blue or light blue.
Foreword – 8/10
The foreword is quite good on the descriptions on the characters and all.But something is lacking. You didn’t describe much on the story. You canwrite a summary or something more on what you’ve written. It doesn’t tellmuch on the story. It’s all about the characters.
Flow/writing quality -12/15
Maybe it’s because there are just two real chapters that I don’t see asmooth writing. I know different people have different writing styles andall. But it’s just not connected as the first chapter is on Hebe and theother on Calvin. There is not connection there. It’s like telling twodifferent people’s lives. However like I said before, maybe it’s just theintroduction for the two main characters first. So I don’t deduct much here.Regarding your writing quality, I really like it. It’s really smooth and theway you put everything together is different. It’s like reading a book,something like an American novel and I really like it.
Storyline/plot – 12/15
Frankly speaking, it’s kind of cliché. I mean I’ve read some stories likethat before – the guy being the playboy, their parents had known each otherlike forever and are trying to matchmake them together.
Originality/creativity – 9/10
Considering your writing quality, it’s good. Even though the plot is not a special one, but your way of bring it out to the readers make it totally different.
Grammar/spelling – 15/15
I don’t spot any grammar mistakes or spelling mistakes here. And you really deserve the full marks. I’ve never came across a story with no mistakes at all. This is my first time.
Casts used – 5/5
It’s a really special pairing. Never had I came across a story with Calvin and Hebe pairing but I’ve seen some stories with the pairing of Hebe and the other three of Fahrenheit members.
Overall enjoyment – 10/10
Even though your plot doesn’t catch much of my attention but your perfect grammar and smooth writing win it all so I totally enjoyed reading it.
Total marks – 87/100 (highly recommendable)
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