You? Vampire?
Title: You? Vampire?
Author: suju501
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/the_undead
Reviewed by: xIaojO
Author: suju501
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/the_undead
Reviewed by: xIaojO
Title: 10 / 10
Absolutely a awesome and creative title you have here as I rarely sees story about vampire around in winglin so truly for this section you should get a full marks.
Absolutely a awesome and creative title you have here as I rarely sees story about vampire around in winglin so truly for this section you should get a full marks.
Creativity of story: 15 / 20
As for this part, it would similar as what I wrote in the title section cause the most creative part of your story is that you used vampire or maybe a horror genre and in between story there's romantic with the combination of sadness. Which gives the reader a feeling of it is not only a horror story but combination of many genre.
As for this part, it would similar as what I wrote in the title section cause the most creative part of your story is that you used vampire or maybe a horror genre and in between story there's romantic with the combination of sadness. Which gives the reader a feeling of it is not only a horror story but combination of many genre.
Poster and Background: 7 / 10
Mmm, through your poster I can sees that it's going to be a cheerful story but after reading the whole story I feels that isnt it supposed to be abit mysterious cause is something about vampire and some part of the story looks eerie with those mystery feeling. Anyway your black background really blends in well with your grey fonts.
Mmm, through your poster I can sees that it's going to be a cheerful story but after reading the whole story I feels that isnt it supposed to be abit mysterious cause is something about vampire and some part of the story looks eerie with those mystery feeling. Anyway your black background really blends in well with your grey fonts.
Cast Used: 5 / 5
I have nothing much to comments here as not really all characters in your story I know except ayumi. =)
I have nothing much to comments here as not really all characters in your story I know except ayumi. =)
Originality: 20 / 20
Okays, another full marks I am giving you for the awesome storyline you have here as no one as I can say in winglin everyone wrote this type of story before so this the original parts of your story.
Okays, another full marks I am giving you for the awesome storyline you have here as no one as I can say in winglin everyone wrote this type of story before so this the original parts of your story.
Story / Plotting: 10 / 20
A just passed for you here in this section in a few parts of your chapters as I thinks you tends to drags the chapter in some point which makes it kind of boring in some way but obviously there's some of your chapters that's interesting and makes me wanna chase on somemore that's make me finish the whole story in one whole day, and some of the chapter were confusing cause you jump from one scene to the another, which can cause your readers to be confusing so try not to drags the chapter and also puts heading of where the scene is going. This is just my short suggestion as a reviewer.
A just passed for you here in this section in a few parts of your chapters as I thinks you tends to drags the chapter in some point which makes it kind of boring in some way but obviously there's some of your chapters that's interesting and makes me wanna chase on somemore that's make me finish the whole story in one whole day, and some of the chapter were confusing cause you jump from one scene to the another, which can cause your readers to be confusing so try not to drags the chapter and also puts heading of where the scene is going. This is just my short suggestion as a reviewer.
Grammer / Spelling: 3 / 5
Mm, I read through the whole story and found out that the first few chapters were alright with grammer and spelling mistakes but after a few chapters, I tends to find a numbers of grammers and spelling mistakes around in your story which you spelt correctly previously so hope that you could check once before posting the chapter as it will reduce the number of spelling mistakes.
Mm, I read through the whole story and found out that the first few chapters were alright with grammer and spelling mistakes but after a few chapters, I tends to find a numbers of grammers and spelling mistakes around in your story which you spelt correctly previously so hope that you could check once before posting the chapter as it will reduce the number of spelling mistakes.
Overall Enjoyment: 10 / 20
Lastly, I kind of enjoy myself in reading this fanfic but still in some of the part, it was boring for me as I don't know whats really happened previously to the characters cause as I say you jumps from one scene to the other and is kind of confusing but overall I still loves the ending cause you kept ayumi together with kim bum. ;)
Lastly, I kind of enjoy myself in reading this fanfic but still in some of the part, it was boring for me as I don't know whats really happened previously to the characters cause as I say you jumps from one scene to the other and is kind of confusing but overall I still loves the ending cause you kept ayumi together with kim bum. ;)
Total: 80 / 100
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