Love knowa no boundaries
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Love knows no boundaries>
Written by: snowangel157>
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/snowangel157>
FF status: Chapter 1 ?33 (completed)>
Reviewed by: Cryselle>>
Title ?8/10>
It is a common title as couples usually say ‘Love has no boundaries?>when they faced obstacles. I know the phrase I’ve mentioned and the >one you used as title is somewhat different by one word but they >meant the same thing.>>
Poster/background ?7/10>
The poster is pretty but the background doesn’t match the poster at >all. The poster gives the feeling of happiness but the background is >so contradicting. Using black as the background gives a feeling of >dark or sad which doesn’t match with the poster at all.>>
Foreword ?10/10>
The foreword is nicely written. You’ve included the actors and >actresses you’ll be using in each of the short stories. Even though >you didn’t write anything about each of the stories, I don’t think >it matters anyway because there’re short stories. If you have to >give a summary of all the short stories, it is in another words >revealing the stories itself. So basically your foreword tells >everything readers have to know about the story.>>
Flow/writing quality ?13/15>
The flow for each of the short stories is just right. Never is the >pace too fast nor too slow. You’ve expressed yourself really well. >When I was reading the story, it is as if I was one of the casts in >the story. Readers are able to be in the situation of the casts. >However, some of the stories or should I say, one of the stories is >rather ambiguous as you didn’t really write what happened. It’s the >one-shot story, Christmas Eve.>>
Storyline/plot ?12/15>
Some of the plots are rather clich? especially the plot for >‘Smile? Both of them died and so they would be together in the >heaven. In ‘Not just a pretty face? I think it’s rather >unrealistic. How can both of them also have scar? And it’s like >they’re wearing caps too. They met and fell in love. In my opinion, >these scenes somehow can only be seen in dramas or movies. ‘The oak >tree?is another typical plot happening in olden China. As for >‘Peach Blossom?and ‘Kites? I wouldn’t say the plots are really >typical ones but there twists that made them different.>>
Originality/creativity ?10/10>
Even though some of the stories, I found them clich?but I like the >way you twist the stories to make it a different one. And I love all >the endings of the short stories too; they just end at the right >time without needing to know what will happen in the future. Even >though you’ve got the inspiration for ‘The Killer?from JJ’s music >video. But you wrote it in much details way such as all the >chemicals he used and the book about ‘Preserving human flesh? >You’ve changed some of the scenes in the music video too like he >untied Hebe and she tried to run away in which it’s a good thing you >changed them. If not, it will look exactly like the music video.>>
Grammar/spelling ?15/15>
Even though I’ve spotted some mistakes but still I give you full >marks for this section. It’s because the mistakes are hardly >noticeable, as the readers will concentrate more on the short >stories as each short stories give different feeling as not all of >them have happy endings. So the emotions involved will be different >as well.>>
Casts used ?4/5>
I’ve no comment on your choice of casts used because some of them, I >myself also think that they’re compatible. Hebe seems to look good >in basically anyone, Chun, Lee Hom, JJ and Jay which are in your >story. Many people start pairing Chun and Ella after their drama >together, Hanakimi which I also agreed that they suit each other. As >for Ella and Kenji and Selina and Mike, I can’t picture them >together.>>
Overall enjoyment ?10/10>
It’s obviously an enjoyable story and not to mention, entertaining >too. As different short stories have different endings which some of >them actually surprised me. =) I especially like the story of >‘Musical? ‘Skirt?and ‘The Killer? Out of the three, I like most >is ‘The killer? everything is so detailed as I really like that >music video very much. It’s really a great piece of art.>>
Total marks ?89/100 [Highly recommendable]>>Keep up the good work!
Love knows no boundaries>
Written by: snowangel157>
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/snowangel157>
FF status: Chapter 1 ?33 (completed)>
Reviewed by: Cryselle>>
Title ?8/10>
It is a common title as couples usually say ‘Love has no boundaries?>when they faced obstacles. I know the phrase I’ve mentioned and the >one you used as title is somewhat different by one word but they >meant the same thing.>>
Poster/background ?7/10>
The poster is pretty but the background doesn’t match the poster at >all. The poster gives the feeling of happiness but the background is >so contradicting. Using black as the background gives a feeling of >dark or sad which doesn’t match with the poster at all.>>
Foreword ?10/10>
The foreword is nicely written. You’ve included the actors and >actresses you’ll be using in each of the short stories. Even though >you didn’t write anything about each of the stories, I don’t think >it matters anyway because there’re short stories. If you have to >give a summary of all the short stories, it is in another words >revealing the stories itself. So basically your foreword tells >everything readers have to know about the story.>>
Flow/writing quality ?13/15>
The flow for each of the short stories is just right. Never is the >pace too fast nor too slow. You’ve expressed yourself really well. >When I was reading the story, it is as if I was one of the casts in >the story. Readers are able to be in the situation of the casts. >However, some of the stories or should I say, one of the stories is >rather ambiguous as you didn’t really write what happened. It’s the >one-shot story, Christmas Eve.>>
Storyline/plot ?12/15>
Some of the plots are rather clich? especially the plot for >‘Smile? Both of them died and so they would be together in the >heaven. In ‘Not just a pretty face? I think it’s rather >unrealistic. How can both of them also have scar? And it’s like >they’re wearing caps too. They met and fell in love. In my opinion, >these scenes somehow can only be seen in dramas or movies. ‘The oak >tree?is another typical plot happening in olden China. As for >‘Peach Blossom?and ‘Kites? I wouldn’t say the plots are really >typical ones but there twists that made them different.>>
Originality/creativity ?10/10>
Even though some of the stories, I found them clich?but I like the >way you twist the stories to make it a different one. And I love all >the endings of the short stories too; they just end at the right >time without needing to know what will happen in the future. Even >though you’ve got the inspiration for ‘The Killer?from JJ’s music >video. But you wrote it in much details way such as all the >chemicals he used and the book about ‘Preserving human flesh? >You’ve changed some of the scenes in the music video too like he >untied Hebe and she tried to run away in which it’s a good thing you >changed them. If not, it will look exactly like the music video.>>
Grammar/spelling ?15/15>
Even though I’ve spotted some mistakes but still I give you full >marks for this section. It’s because the mistakes are hardly >noticeable, as the readers will concentrate more on the short >stories as each short stories give different feeling as not all of >them have happy endings. So the emotions involved will be different >as well.>>
Casts used ?4/5>
I’ve no comment on your choice of casts used because some of them, I >myself also think that they’re compatible. Hebe seems to look good >in basically anyone, Chun, Lee Hom, JJ and Jay which are in your >story. Many people start pairing Chun and Ella after their drama >together, Hanakimi which I also agreed that they suit each other. As >for Ella and Kenji and Selina and Mike, I can’t picture them >together.>>
Overall enjoyment ?10/10>
It’s obviously an enjoyable story and not to mention, entertaining >too. As different short stories have different endings which some of >them actually surprised me. =) I especially like the story of >‘Musical? ‘Skirt?and ‘The Killer? Out of the three, I like most >is ‘The killer? everything is so detailed as I really like that >music video very much. It’s really a great piece of art.>>
Total marks ?89/100 [Highly recommendable]>>Keep up the good work!
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