Scattered in the Wind
Title: Scattered in the Wind
Author: JiShin
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/jishin4
Reviewer: Fvone =)
Title = 9 /10
The title itself is very catchy, giving out a sense of melancholiness. Personally, I like it a lot as it is somewhat related to the part where YooChun always feels a gentle breeze around his neck whenever JunSu is around. Reason why is it not a 10 is because I’ve yet to figure out why is it ‘scattered’. Nonetheless, I would still say that just by reading the title, one can actually sense that this would be a high-quality fic. =D
Forewords = 9 /10
It’s very short yet of great impact. At first, I do not quite understand the prologue but towards the end, everything is very clear. Forewords did not reveal too much about the story which I think it’s so good thing so as to keep your readers on tippy-toes as it interests them more with vague beginnings. Excellent.
Creativity of the story = 8 /10
There’s a recent trend of shōnen-ai(if this is the way to call it) stories going around in Winglin these days so it’s not really surprising to see another one appearing again. About one character contracting a terminal disease is also rather common but at least you came up with the idea of having a hole in the heart rather than ‘brain tumor’ and such. I really have to emphasize once again that the way you link the souls of YooChun and JunSu is indeed very creative. What I am talking about is the part where YooChun could always sense the presence of JunSu. It’s the very first time I’ve came across such an idea so it’s definitely a very refreshing idea! Moreover, you had the foundations of the story based on Music and you made the effort to elaborate on the feelings and mood every single note is trying to portray. A great job done on your part! ^^
Posters & background = 10 /10
No poster for this story but it doesn’t affect the story at all! Awesome background you have, and did I mention how much I love those two big butterflies? It sorts of give out a ‘Happy Family’ mood when placed together with the other small ones. Background is also leaning towards a darker shade, thus contrasting with the white font every well; words are more of less clear so there isn’t a strain on the eyes. No doubt but full marks for this segment! =]
Casts used = 5 /5
Personally, I’m not really a fan for Korean artistes so I have no idea who are they at all. I think on this part, having only 2 leads make it much easier for readers like me to read since we cannot really imagine their looks in my brains. Having only 2 mains also helps to keep the story focus and more comprehensive for the readers. I’ve scanned through the main page of Winglin and found out that there’s quite a number of ffs featuring Korean artistes which means that you’re on the right track for attracting everybody’s attention! Therefore, it’s another job well done! =)
Originality= 18 /20
Greats, I don’t see the difference between this segment and ‘Creativity of story’. Oh wells, since I seldom read HS stories, it’s still a very refreshing genre for me and I must say that it interests me a lot! I’m a great fan of music myself and it amazes me who you managed to revolve everything around a single music piece, ‘Eyes So true’. Just by reading the way you describe it makes it sound as if it’s really a very good piece! I wonder if there’s really such a song in real life or not but if there isn’t, I must really say that it’s really creative of you to come up with it. =D
Storyline/plotting = 20 /20
I TOTALLY LOVE YOUR UNIQUE STYLE OF WRITING! The flow of the story is great, everything seems to slow and serene, making it very comfortable for one to read this story. Reality and flashbacks are also very clear even though you did not state them. Changing of scenes is also done smoothly with no awkward twists; thumbs up!
Although it’s a sad ending, it’s a very perfect one! Prologue tallies with the ending, showing detailed plotting before starting this story and everything is explained clearly towards the end. Kudos! ^^
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary = 5 /5
Definitely full marks! Vocabulary-wise is good and there isn’t any spelling or grammatical mistakes as much as I’ve noticed. =]
Overall enjoyment = 10 /10
I enjoyed reading the story a lot! It’s such a tear-jerker! Highly recommended for everybody to read it again and again because it’s a classic, showing that true love does exist. It also teaches us not to hesitate when it comes to telling your loved ones that you love them because you’ll never know what would happen in the next second. Overall, this is one of the most touching romance fic I’ve ever read! –claps!-
Total: 96 /100
The plot is very simple yet able to portray the dilemma of our leads. A very touching fic which can really activate the tear glands as readers felt as though they were the characters themselves since you can really describe things very well. Recommended for anybody who wants read a high-quality story, well done!
Author: JiShin
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/jishin4
Reviewer: Fvone =)
Title = 9 /10
The title itself is very catchy, giving out a sense of melancholiness. Personally, I like it a lot as it is somewhat related to the part where YooChun always feels a gentle breeze around his neck whenever JunSu is around. Reason why is it not a 10 is because I’ve yet to figure out why is it ‘scattered’. Nonetheless, I would still say that just by reading the title, one can actually sense that this would be a high-quality fic. =D
Forewords = 9 /10
It’s very short yet of great impact. At first, I do not quite understand the prologue but towards the end, everything is very clear. Forewords did not reveal too much about the story which I think it’s so good thing so as to keep your readers on tippy-toes as it interests them more with vague beginnings. Excellent.
Creativity of the story = 8 /10
There’s a recent trend of shōnen-ai(if this is the way to call it) stories going around in Winglin these days so it’s not really surprising to see another one appearing again. About one character contracting a terminal disease is also rather common but at least you came up with the idea of having a hole in the heart rather than ‘brain tumor’ and such. I really have to emphasize once again that the way you link the souls of YooChun and JunSu is indeed very creative. What I am talking about is the part where YooChun could always sense the presence of JunSu. It’s the very first time I’ve came across such an idea so it’s definitely a very refreshing idea! Moreover, you had the foundations of the story based on Music and you made the effort to elaborate on the feelings and mood every single note is trying to portray. A great job done on your part! ^^
Posters & background = 10 /10
No poster for this story but it doesn’t affect the story at all! Awesome background you have, and did I mention how much I love those two big butterflies? It sorts of give out a ‘Happy Family’ mood when placed together with the other small ones. Background is also leaning towards a darker shade, thus contrasting with the white font every well; words are more of less clear so there isn’t a strain on the eyes. No doubt but full marks for this segment! =]
Casts used = 5 /5
Personally, I’m not really a fan for Korean artistes so I have no idea who are they at all. I think on this part, having only 2 leads make it much easier for readers like me to read since we cannot really imagine their looks in my brains. Having only 2 mains also helps to keep the story focus and more comprehensive for the readers. I’ve scanned through the main page of Winglin and found out that there’s quite a number of ffs featuring Korean artistes which means that you’re on the right track for attracting everybody’s attention! Therefore, it’s another job well done! =)
Originality= 18 /20
Greats, I don’t see the difference between this segment and ‘Creativity of story’. Oh wells, since I seldom read HS stories, it’s still a very refreshing genre for me and I must say that it interests me a lot! I’m a great fan of music myself and it amazes me who you managed to revolve everything around a single music piece, ‘Eyes So true’. Just by reading the way you describe it makes it sound as if it’s really a very good piece! I wonder if there’s really such a song in real life or not but if there isn’t, I must really say that it’s really creative of you to come up with it. =D
Storyline/plotting = 20 /20
I TOTALLY LOVE YOUR UNIQUE STYLE OF WRITING! The flow of the story is great, everything seems to slow and serene, making it very comfortable for one to read this story. Reality and flashbacks are also very clear even though you did not state them. Changing of scenes is also done smoothly with no awkward twists; thumbs up!
Although it’s a sad ending, it’s a very perfect one! Prologue tallies with the ending, showing detailed plotting before starting this story and everything is explained clearly towards the end. Kudos! ^^
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary = 5 /5
Definitely full marks! Vocabulary-wise is good and there isn’t any spelling or grammatical mistakes as much as I’ve noticed. =]
Overall enjoyment = 10 /10
I enjoyed reading the story a lot! It’s such a tear-jerker! Highly recommended for everybody to read it again and again because it’s a classic, showing that true love does exist. It also teaches us not to hesitate when it comes to telling your loved ones that you love them because you’ll never know what would happen in the next second. Overall, this is one of the most touching romance fic I’ve ever read! –claps!-
Total: 96 /100
The plot is very simple yet able to portray the dilemma of our leads. A very touching fic which can really activate the tear glands as readers felt as though they were the characters themselves since you can really describe things very well. Recommended for anybody who wants read a high-quality story, well done!
posted by Viva - teamo at
8:54 PM
1 Comments:
Hello Fvone! =P
Firstly I must really thank you very much for acclaiming my fic! I guess you might already know that this is the first time I try my hands on a Boys' Love story, so it's very heartening to receive a positive feedback! I must say this is indeed a milestone in my writing journey, and I'll definitely strive on! =)
Thanks again for putting my apprehensions at ease, for I'd been slightly disconcerted when learning from a few readers that they'd find this story confusing, but you really put a great load off my chest! Kudos to you and I appreciate your effort in reading and reviewing my story immensely!
Yet again, THANK YOU!~! Take care and God bless~! =D
xoxo
JiShin
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