Unhindered

Title: Unhindered

Author: jaychou101

URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/jaychou101/

Reviewed By: Yvonne

Title = 8/10

Interesting Title. Definately new to all winglin readers.

Creativity of the story = 15/20
So far in the 5 chaps of your story I find it really creative.The party,the overprotective parents.Good job.

Posters & background = 5 /10
I find the poster very cramped and messy, and you didn't put in a background colour or changed the font colour as well.But for the effort of making your own poster I give you 5 marks.

Casts used = 4/5

S.H.E and Fahrenheit is popular nowadays.

Originality= 17/20

I like how you start with Hebe and Calvin breaking up and introducing Calvin's playboy personality.

Storyline/plotting = 18 /20

I can't tell much from the first 5 chaps as it's still progressing on but so far it's going just fine.But I have to point out that it's not advisable to jump so far as in the forwards it was wen she broke up wit calvin and in chapter 1 you didn't say how long it was after that incident and just started with Hebe and her friends graduating.You'll confuse the readers.

Spelling/Grammar = 5/5

So far I didn't see any so keep up the good work

Overall enjoyment = 8 /10

I enjoyed reading your story. I might continue reading on as well.

Total: 80 / 100